Visit 2

Colin Burlingham
12/19/09
The Warm Shelter

_____T)Today, I went on my second visit, in which I served the food to those brave citizens. 1)These people are normal like you and I and they even eat the same foods like baked ziti or Shepperd's pie. 2)All of them were very close and everyone was involved in a conversation when they were eating. 3)If I saw most of them on a street, I would not even know they were homeless. 1)One of the men I saw last time was there. 2)He is really good at guitar and I think he would have fun in a band. 3)I wonder if he is in a band? 1)There may have been around 30 people throughout lunch, and out of all of them, there were only two close to my age. 2)One I did not hear speak a word throughout the entire meal, but the other was chatting away with an older woman. 3)They were both wearing sweatshirts and looked as if they were cold when they left. C)Seeing all of the normal people who did not fit in with society has really shone me that no madder how poor, or how you look, we are all the same on the inside.

1st Visit to The Warm Shelter

Colin Burlingham
Assessment
12/15/09

_____(TS)Well, today I had my first visit and I got to learn about what I am to do, what they are to do, and what the people are like. (SD)When I walked into the door, Joy, the volunteer coordinator, started telling me about what they want to do in the distant future. (CM)Last year, they were given a total sum of $1.5 million dollars from the federal government. (CM)With this money, they are planing to build more housing and a better kitchen, which should "end homelessness in the area." (SD)Once this hopeful vision was completed, Joy gave me a tour of the facilities and introduced me to most of the staff. (CM)Everyone seemed nice, especial the cook, and I must say, this place of peace and prosperity was bigger than it looked. (CM)When I got to the kitchen, I instantly began wondering how they could serve so many because it was no bigger than the green house down by the playground. (SD)Once I was finished looking around, Joy took me to see the residents. (CM)As soon as I had set foot in the room, I thought they were in a dorm at some big school. (CM)They were all so close and yet, they still had a lot of responsibilities to prepare them for when they could live on their own like, drug and alcohol tests randomly, they had to be out of bed by seven and have it made by seven thirty, if they made any money, they needed to save it, and they would have to constantly have to help out in the kitchen. (CS)These people have surprised me in so many ways and I can't wait to visit again.

essay 10, Final Draft

Colin Burlingham

Mr. H Salsich

8 English

12/9/09

A Red Little Rooster:

An Essay About Mr. Ewell being

Called a "Red Little Rooster"

_____(TS)I remember this good friend of mine I saw rarely in the summer. (CM)He used to remind me of a monkey because he was always climbing trees. (CM)In the book, To Kill a Mockingbird, Scout called Mr. Ewell "a red little rooster," and I realized that this metaphor fit him perfectly. (CS)I began to wonder if there was a good metaphor that would describe me.

_____(TS)In the book To Kill A Mockingbird by Harper Lee, Mr. Ewell is referred to as a "Red little rooster." (SD)In every pen at a farm, there will only be one rooster or one Mr. Ewell who will try to get rid of every other rooster or black man he can find. (CM)Even though, Mr. Ewell has nothing, he is fighting this man, trying to show that he is superior than Tom Robinson. (CM)At the moment, there are two "roosters" in his pen and only one can come out on top. (SD)The rooster is an animal that is over confident and fierce and Mr. Ewell is the same way. (CM)Before the Tom Robinson trial, Mr Ewell thought he would win for sure, thinking no man would defend a black, but as time went on he saw the error in his ways and realized that some people would defend blacks. (CM)He also thought he was fierce and strong, putting a black man in jail, but when the time came, he again showed his true colors. (SD)Tom Robinson is black, while Mr. Ewell is white and he will stop at nothing to get rid of him. (CM)Sometimes, a rooster may hurt a hen to get what they want, and the "Red little rooster" has done exactly this. (CM)He has made several complaints to get rid of the black roosters, but he had to take matters into his own hands, and resorted into beating his own daughter in the single thought of driving Tom Robinson away. (CS)Mr Ewell or the "red little rooster," you decide.

_____(TS)Like Mr Ewell has a metaphor to describe him, I think I am like a cloud drifting in the sky. (SD)The significant reason is that a cloud has no way to guide its self. (CM)I will go where ever the wind takes me: no planing, no steering, no directions. (CM)When I'm lying on a raft in the water, I have no control, and the tide is in control of my destiny, just like the wind controls a cloud. (SD)Sometimes, a cloud can help in a complicated process of nature, and bring the colors of the rainbow to the worlds floor, as I can help in the complicated social life and help my friends to where they need to go. (CM)I will often be one of the "Clouds" that help bring a machine to life. (CM)For instance, last year, I was one of the few who made a mechanical creation and brought it to life; though it was not as beautiful as a rainbow, it had its own beauty, like the snow on the trees glistening beneath the sun. (SD)In other occasions, a cloud may vanish, leaving nothing but a sparkling night sky in its place and I have "vanished" many times too. (CM)Sometimes for a minute, or sometimes for an hour, I or the cloud will be gone. (CM)Why, just yesterday, I was missing for an hour while my dad was waiting with the car. (CS)Clouds and I are the same; flow in all directions and are uncontrollable.

_____(TS)Mr Ewell and all people are the same in a way; we can all find a metaphor that can fit into our personality wonderfully. (CM)When I was younger, I knew this kid who was "a monkey" because I only saw him in trees. (CM)I have always thought of my self as a cloud drifting in the wind. (CS)Now, take a minute out of your lives and think; what would you be like.

essay 9, Final Draft

Colin Burlingham
Mr. H Salsich
8 English
12/5/09

IRONY:

What, Where, Why

_____(TS)What is "irony"? (CM)According to Dictionary.com, irony is the use of words to convey a meaning that is the opposite of its literal meaning. (CM)Irony is found everywhere; in books, at home, at work, and even just walking down the street, you might see irony. (CS)Two of the many places you might find irony is in the book To Kill a Mockingbird by Harper Lee, and also in my own life.
_____(TS)Irony is everywhere in the novel. (SD)In the beginning of the book, Scout goes to school for the first time and is instantly at the top of the class because she knows how to read. (CM)Scout gets in trouble by her new teacher for “knowing to much.” (CM)This is ironic because she has learned and enjoyed doing it, but when she gets to school, ready for more knowledge, the teacher thinks she is too smart so she sits in class silently. (SD)As you get farther into the book, Scout and Jem are getting many small surprises in the nut hole in front of the Radley’s house. (CM)These gifts were given to them by Boo on his quest for a friend, but when Scout and Jem tried to give him a note thanking him for all the wonderful gifts, the nut hole was filled with cement. I find this very ironic because the moment they tried to thank him, they couldn’t. (SD)As you get farther into the book, you will get to Atticuses big trial day. (CM)On the way to the trial, Scout and Jem saw Mr. Dalphus Ramond sitting with some black people and Scout asked, “Why’s he sittin’ with the colored folks,” when she saw him there (dependent adverb-clause). I find it ironic how later, Scout went to the court trial and had to sit with only “colored folks”. (CS)As you can see, irony plays an important role in the epic tail of To Kill a Mockingbird.
____(TS)Irony is in every aspect of my life. (SD)Whenever my sister comes back from Middlesex Boarding School, I will say she is lazy. (CM)I say this because she doesn’t do the simplest of tasks like getting the remote off the top of the TV, but later, I might not get up to do the same task. (CM)This is ironic because I will not do what I am telling my sister to do. (SD)General speaking, Christmas comes but once a year and my house always looks beautiful. (CM)Unlike a lot of people, I almost always go away for Christmas so no one is able to see all the decorations at my house. (CM)The irony exists, because there is no point in setting up all the lights and decorations because no one sees them. (SD)In addition, I am not the most religious person around, but I do believe in God. (CM)I never go to church, but still claim to be part of the church and in a few places around my house; you might find an angel or something. (CM)Here, you see some irony again because we are not religious at all and we are doing something different than what we say. (CS)As you can see, irony is a important part of my life and it is everywhere.
_____(TS)In the street, in books, in stores, at home, and even at work you might find irony. (CM)Irony can mean many different things, but irony usually means the opposite of its actual meaning. (CM)Now take a minute to think about irony in your life. (CS)If you can not think of anything, well that's irony right there.

Final Draft essay 8

Colin Burlingham
Mr. H Salsich
8 English
11/18/09

To Be Unwanted

_____(TS)Have you ever felt unwanted, because I know I have. (CM)I remember hating the feeling of being excluded and ignored. (CM)No one I knew would want me near them and I bet others have felt the same way. (C)In To Kill a Mockingbird by Harper Lee, people feel unwanted; in the past, people have felt unwanted; in the present, people feel unwanted; and in the future many people will continue to feel unwanted and unneeded.

_____(TS)To feel undesirable is a terrible curse which no one deserves, and many people are holding this horrid fulmination (complex sentence and adj. clause). (SD)In chapter twelve of To Kill a Mockingbird, Calpurnia took Jem and Scout to her "black church" with only good intentions in mind, but it turned out to be a big mistake. (CM)The Finches' were being made fun of by everyone and even the smallest child could tell “they did not want [them] [t]here”. (CM)Cal’s “comp’ny” was redundantly ridiculed and Scout and Jem just wanted to go home, but they stayed and faced the hardships together, long enough to overcome them. (SD)On another occasion, Scout was in the kitchen eavesdropping on her Aunt Alexandra's conversation with Atticus and she heard her aunt say Atticus had to get rid of her. (CM)The one thing that stood out from what they were saying about Scout was, “…you’ve got to do something about her,” and after hearing those few words, Scout almost ran away because she was felt so unwanted. (CM)Luckily, Scout found out that they were not talking about her and she was there to stay. (SD)On a more poignant side, Dill ran away from his family and friends and hid under Scout’s bed because he was unwanted in his own family. (CM)Mistreated and ignored, the only place Dill could go was to Scout, who happened to be his "wife", and he was told he could stay for a short time (complex sentence and adj. clause). (CM)Yet, after all that, Dill still considered himself lucky because he had somewhere “to run off to,” unlike many other helpless people. (CS)As you can see, to be unwanted, ostracized, and unneeded is a terrible curse that you should never have to face alone.

_____(TS)Who might feel unwanted in our world to day? (SD)There are many people, but one famous one is George W. Bush. (CM)Mr. Bush, who is ridiculed and bullied every day, is disliked and unwanted, but there are still some people who look up to him and that small hope gives him courage (complex sentence and adj. clause). (CM)When he went to Pakistan last year, still during his time as the president, a shoe was thrown at him, and this was the most disrespectful thing you can do to disgrace someone in the Pakistanian culture, and
Bush was very humiliated and hated. (SD)On a non political side of being unwanted, if a celebrity makes one mistake, they are cast out on the streets. (CM)Last week, I was in Washington D.C. at the Newsiam, where I saw an old newspaper with a celebrity on the cover, and he is now homeless and poor, because he made a small mistake, and he picked a very bad movie that no one liked. (CM)He won many awards, but just as quickly as he rose to fame, he was kicked and with less than he started with. (SD)Every now and then, you might pass an abandoned cat or dog on the side of the road, who are wandering, and looking for food. (CM)Those pets have been cast away from their homes and families for good and are unwanted like many people. (CM)With out the skills to survive in the wild, they will surely die, lonely and hungry. (CS)As you can see, everyone can feel unwanted at some point in their lives, from George W. Bush to your simple house pet.

_____(TS)I have felt what it is like to be unwanted and no man nor woman should ever have to go through that same feeling. (CM)People are being ridiculed and ignored all around us from the men at the homeless shelter to President Obama trying to save this country. (CM)The question is, are you unwanted or have you made others feel unwanted? (CS)If you have made others feel unwanted, you should correct the damage that has been done and make things right again, like the good old times.

English Work

Colin Burlingham
Mr. H Salsich
8 English
11/5/09

Colin’s English Work:
What I have Learned and
Need to Work on This Year.

_____(TS)This year in eighth grade English class, I, an eighth grader and a future architect, have gotten better and worse. (SD)One of the diverse skills I have enhanced is my writing. (CM)Now, I know how to use antithesis; I know how to use anaphora; and I know how to use much more. (CM)I have also learned to write an effective 11 sentence paragraph like the one you happen to be reading at this moment. (SD)To go on, one of the colossal subjects I need to work on is my jargon. (CM)I am very bad at terminology and I got a 34% on the vocabulary section of the SSATs. (CM)If I ever expect to go to a good school in my future, I will need to kick that low grade up to at least a 60% average. (SD)I also need to work on my reading. (CM)At the moment, I am reading To Kill a Mockingbird by Harper Lee and I read it very slow. (CM)I will need to muse on my reading to make it more systematic and much quicker. (CS)There will always be room for improvement and I will keep working hard.

Essay 7 Final Draft

Colin Burlingham
Mr. H Salsich
8 English
10/28/09

Trepidation:
An Essay about Fear in My Life

_____(TS) Halloween is a night where people of all ages dress in scary costumes, collect candy, and fear the nights surprises. (CM)You can trick or treat; you can scare small children; or you can even toilet paper a house to have fun on Halloween. (CM)The frightened children will run around and amuse themselves on this joyous occasion. (CS)In my life, I have had many fears and they will continue to come, but I will keep over coming them.

_____(TS)Fear is in all our lives no matter where we are, where we have been, or where we will go. (SD)When I was very young, I had one big fear: being alone in a big room with no light. (CM)This scared me until I was around the age of five and on one particular day, my sister turned out the lights and locked the door to the basement so I was stuck in my worst nightmare. (CM)I was freaking out, thinking monsters would come and take me away, but after some time of facing my fear alone, I was freed from the horrible torture. (SD)To this day, one of my current fears is death of parents, of Caroline, of relatives and of close friends. (CM)I have always been afraid of death; to be alone in this big world would be an appalling experience. (CM)My family is the most important thing in this world to me, and without family, I don’t know what I would do. (SD)In the future, I am sure I will have many fears: failing big exams, not getting into college, or even not getting a decent job. (CM)My future is very important to me and I know that fears will be apart of it. (CM)The future will be hard, but I will do my best to over come each fear as it rises up to face me. (CS)No matter how hard I try, no matter what I do, I will always have apprehension.

_____(TS)Fear, consternation, trepidation, apprehension; these are the entire lexis that may come up in our daily lives. (SD)Many people all over the world have truly seen fear at its highest point. (CM)When I was scuba diving in the British Virgin Islands over the summer, and I looked down at my air gauge, I felt that fear. (CM)It was practically depleted and my guide, not understanding, would not let me go back to the surface. (SD)Earlier in my life, when I was about five years old, I was on one of the White Islands in Maine playing on the rocks that were dampened by the vigorous waves. (CM)Quickly, I slipped and I fell to what I thought was the end and this is when my fear began. (CM)The last moment I remember is when I woke up briefly; my mom yelling at my dad to go faster in the boat; my aunt freaking out in the bow of the boat, and speeding through the big and little waves; I then blacked out. (SD)In addition, last year, I was in my mom’s BMW convertible leaving Farmholme Road when we got stuck in traffic in the thinnest part of the road. (CM)On the other side of the road, an eighteen wheeler came up and hit a rock which made the entire thing slant down at us. (CM)Looking up, all I could see was a tractor, green with big wheels, and the optical illusion that is was moving towards us. (CS)Fear consists of being afraid and I have truly experienced this scary complex process of emotions.

_____(SD)Halloween has always been a great holiday and an American tradition. (CM)We can trick or treat, or scare young ones on this dark night of horror. (CM)Everyone enjoys themselves, hanging out with their friends and family, and the candy collected is always revered. (CS)Halloween may be a night of fear in the neighborhoods, but children everywhere have learned to overcome their fears and enjoy themselves on this spooky night.

Essay 6, Final Draft

Colin Burlingham
Mr. H Salsich
8 English
10/21/09

Two of a Kind:
The Similarities and

Differences of
Jem and Scout

_____(SD)Autumn is a time where wind, rain and old dying leaves whip at your face in all directions. (CM)Miserable as the weather may be, this is a time of excitement and joy. (CM)Various holidays such as Halloween and Thanksgiving are when you spend time with your friends and family, and all the leaves fall off the trees. (CS)This is about leaves in particular; they may be different colors, shapes, or sizes, but they will always be the same on the inside.
_____(TS)In chapter seven of To Kill a Mockingbird, Scout and Jem, brother and sister, both very smart siblings, are like two leaves on a tree; they sway in the wind; they fall to the ground; they are blown away (anaphora and app. S-V split). (SD)Jem and Scout are like the foliage on a single tree; if one falls, so does the other. (CM)While Scout was thinking of her brother Jem, she said, “If I had gone alone to the Radley Place at two in the morning, my funeral would have been the next afternoon,” and this shows that she is unified with him. (CM)If Jem had died that night at the Radleys, Scout would have also died; two die, or two live, that’s how it works (antithesis). (SD)Occasionally, Jem and Scout can be as different as a pebble and a boulder, two utterly original substances in existence. (CM)Sometimes, nobody can “tell what you’re gonna do lest they live in the same house with you, and even,” then Scout can’t tell what Jem is going to do. (CM)Jem and Scout can be like two different atoms, a negatively and a positively charged nucleus (appositive closer). (SD)The knot-hole, a small fissure (FAST) in a tree with many leaves on the Radley’s property, was a collective spot that someone put rare items in, and this brings Scout and Jem as one when they explore it together. (CM)Once Jem and Scout had found this captivity of exquisite ravishes, they claimed it as their own property. (CM)Mutually, they would gather at the opening to find a new treasure each week, and Scout and Jem cherished these riches, protecting them and examining them together (participle closer). (CS)Close and far, these two, good and bad, work as one collectively (antithesis).
_____(TS)Just like Jem, I have a sister named Caroline, a smart and kind girl, athletic and fun, and we can agree, and we can disagree (antithesis and appositive S-V split). (SD)Caroline and I are like two leaves; we can sit on a branch; we can fall to the ground; and we can blow in the winds to new and exotic places just like leaves (anaphora). (CM)With my sister, I have gone to the end of the world and back, and along the way, we are meeting people and letting our curiosity wander. (CM)A few years ago, we took an amazing adventure to Taiwan and I will remember it always, exploring the city; exploring the hotel; and exploring the waters too (anaphora). (SD)There have always been those dreadful moments when we have disagreed about frivolous things. (CM)In fact, just last week we came back from Middlesex Boarding School and we started arguing about what movie we should watch within the hour of our arrival. (CM)We finally agreed on a movie about a man who lived in New York, working as a photographer for a magazine (participle closer). (SD)Earlier, on a cold summer's night, we were up in North Haven, Maine when we heard a cat, meowing at the door. (CM)We both agreed to not tell anyone about our new secret pet and we would discreetly feed it every night before bed. (CM)One day, it disappeared and did not come back and we were devastated, and this is like Scout and Jems’ knot-hole in the Radley’s tree which was filled in with cement. (CS)Scout and Jem, Caroline and Colin, we are all the same; we are all like the two leaves out in the open; we are all family, and nothing can ever change that (anaphora).
_____(SD)Autumn consists of many occasions where you spend joyous times with your family and friends. (CM)You can hunt for candy during Halloween or have a nice family dinner during Thanksgiving. (CM)One thing that never changes are the leaves falling from the trees; they may look different, yet they are all the same. (CS)To Kill A Mocking Bird is a story of two leaves, two people, and two friends!

Out Line

_____________________Body 1__________

(TS)Two leaves on a tree
_(SD)Foliage
__(CM)My funeral
__(CM)Jem die, Scout die
_(SD)Pebble and a boulder
__(CM)Tell what you’re gonna do
__(CM)Two different atoms
_(SD)The knot-hole
__(CM)Own property.
__(CM)Find a new treasure each week
(CS)Work collectively

_____________________Body 2__________
(TS)me and Caroline like 2 leaves
_(SD)exotic places
__(CM)meeting people

__(CM)Taiwan
_(SD)disagreeing
__(CM)last week came home
__(CM)argue about movie
_(SD)cat
__(CM)secret

__(CM)like knot-hole
(CS)family

Essay 5, Final Draft

Colin Burlingham

Mr. H Salsich

8th Grade English

10/14/09

Privacy Is Hard To Please:

An essay about Privacy

in To Kill A Mocking Bird

_____(TS)Privacy is like the wind; it comes and it goes. (CM)You can catch it, but it will only get away in the future. (CM)Some people need privacy, and some people don’t need privacy. (CS)In chapter five of To Kill A Mockingbird, privacy is a necessity to Jem and Dill when they are contemplating pranks and schemes.

_____(TS)To have privacy is a hard thing; there is always someone who will try to find out all your secrets. (SD)In the book To Kill A Mockingbird by Harper Lee, privacy is taking place in many places such as in Jem's tree house. (CM)Jem and Dill were spending “most of their time together in the tree house plotting and planning,” and they would only let Scout in if they needed her; otherwise, she was not allowed to share in their secrets. (CM)Scout later gave up because Jem and Dill wanted their privacy badly. (SD)One day, Scout was sitting with Miss Maudie, a wise old woman, and they were talking about Boo Radley, saying he probably had many secrets in his house that were kept private. (CM)“What happens in houses behind closed doors, what secrets—,” those few words left them wondering, what was in the house and what was he keeping private? (CM)Boo Radley is known by all, and unknown by all (antithesis). (SD)On one of Jem and Dills brilliant schemes, Scout comes and helps them keep lookout while they try to give a note to Boo Radley, but unfortunately, Atticus comes and tells them to stop. (CM)Atticus feels that if Boo “[…] wanted to come out, he would,” but if he “wanted to stay inside free from the attentions […]” from the rest of the people in Maycomb, he should be allowed. (CM)Atticus also thinks that even if Boo seems cool and mysterious, he should be able to have his privacy. (CS)Privacy can be hard to obtain; many people work hard to get it, such as Boo Radley, but many people also try to stop it and expose the person’s secrets, such as Jem and Dill.

_____(TS)Every now and then, I will yearn for diminutive moments of privacy. (SD)A few days ago during my dad’s band practice, the singer brought two young kids over because she could not find a baby sitter. (CM)All the kids wanted to do was play video games, but I did not know that they would get so excited; they immediately started screaming and running around. (CM)Then they started playing with the computer I was doing my homework on so I had to start over on my mom’s computer and all I wanted was some privacy. (SD)Earlier, during the summer, I was playing with my friend, when his neighbor came up and wanted to play. (CM)The neighbor would not leave, a stranger with a round and plump body (appositive closer). (CM)This was like when Jem and Dill “spent the days together in the tree house plotting and planning,” and they would only allow Scout in if they needed her to help in their private plots. (SD)One morning, I was on a short jog when I saw a man, privately sleeping in his backyard. (CM)All of a sudden, he was hit in the head with a water balloon thrown by two kids and we got soaked. (CM)This is the same as when Scout, Jem, and Dill were trying to put the note in the Radley house, they were intruding on his personal space and privacy. (CS)Everyone will enjoy privacy while they have it, but when it is gone, they will eagerly try to get it back.

_____(TS)The wind comes and goes, just like privacy. (CM)One day it will be here, sitting in the palm of your hand like a butterfly, and later, it will silently fly away. (CM)Everyone needs privacy such as Mr. Radley, but you should never have it all the time. (CS) In the words of a great person, “The real danger is the gradual erosion of individual liberties through automation, integration, and interconnection of many small, separate record-keeping systems, each of which alone may seem innocuous, even benevolent, and wholly justifiable (quoteland.com).”

Out Line

TS: Always no privacy
SD: During band practice, 2 kids came over
CM: Singers kids playing video games, excitedly jumping and cheering
CM: Kept running and playing with computer I was using
SD: Playing with friend
CM: Did not want to include neighbor
CM: Jem and Dill planning, not want Scout
SD: On run and see man sleeping
CM: Two kids come up and nail him with a water balloon
CM: Like Jem, Scout, and Dill putting note in Radley house
CS: Everyone can enjoy privacy, not many get it

Essay 4, Final Draft

Out Line

1st body

TS: Articus (S-V split) feels that education is important

SD: Articus enjoys teaching Scout

CM: looks forward to reading every night

CM: wants her to stay in school

SD: don’t be like Burris Ewell

CM: Disgrace of town

CM: Lives like animal

SD: Articus makes a deal

CM: go to school and we will read

CM: keep deal secret

CS: Articus feels strongly about education

2nd body

TS: education should be fun, you learn your own way, and learn by doing

SD: education should be fun

CM: you will remember better

CM: Scout had fun learning with father

SD: should do what you want to do

CM: learn how you want and are good at

CM: Scout liked to learn with her dad

SD: learn by doing

CM: Scout learned to read by practicing

CM: if she waited till school, she would be bad

CS: important to do things the way you want

Second Draft For Grading

Colin Burlingham

Mr. H Salsich

English 8

10/7/09

EDUCATION:
An Essay About How Atticus
Feels About Education

(TS)When I was younger, I would ask my parents why I had to go to school. (CM)Every time, they would both say that I needed to learn the basics of knowledge that everyone would need to live a productive life and that if I did learn this, I would grow up to be very successful. (CM)Thinking this, I would get up early and I was excited for school. (CS)Atticus, Scouts father, also thinks that education is extremely important.
(TS)Atticus, a smart and kind man, the father of Scout and Jem, feels that education is exceedingly important (app. S-V split). (SD)Atticus enjoys teaching Scout, a very smart young girl, very much, and he reads with her almost every night, but when Scout told him this had to stop, he was devastated. (CM)Atticus was waiting with the paper excided to read when Scout sadly said, “[…] If I on goin’ to school, we can’t ever read any more…” and that made Atticus awfully sad and he was curios why he could not teach her any more. (CM)After Scout told him what had happened that day, Atticus then tells Scout that she should stay in school and put her self in Ms. Caroline’s “[…] skin and walk around in it,” you will never understand the person and why they have done what they have done. (SD)After that, Atticus told Scout he did not want Scout to be anything like the Ewell family. (CM)The Ewell family only goes to school the first day of the year and they are the disgrace of the town. (CM)The Ewells, dirty rotten misfits, live like animals and they also have never worked an honest day in their lives according to Atticus and most of the town. (SD)Later, Atticus strikes up a great deal with Scout; “If you’ll concede the necessity of going to school, we’ll go on reading every night just as we always have,” and then Scout agrees with this clever barging. (CM)Atticus then tells Scout to keep this deal quiet because if Ms. Caroline, the kind, discipline, school teacher, finds out, she would hunt him down (app. S-V split). (CM)Atticus thinks that he should still be aloud to teach Scout, but he respects her as the teacher and does not want to get in her way. (CS)As you can see, Atticus has very strong feelings toward education and wants Scout to go to school no madder what so she can learn and fit in with everyone around her.
(TS)I think education should be taught the way you learn best and you should learn by doing something fun with it. (SD)According to Wikipedia.com, fun is an activity that is enjoyable or amusing. (CM)Education should be fun, and I think that you will remember what you have learned better if the teacher makes it amusing for you. (CM)When Atticus and Scout were reading in the evenings, sitting on the couch reading the paper, he made education fun and enjoyable for Scout, reading was learned faster and more efficiently. (SD)If you are being taught, you should also be educated in the manner that best suits you, learning from hands on experiences (participle closer). (CM)If all you do is read books, that gets boring fast and you zone out, but if you go out and learn how you want to, you will remember it longer. (CM)On Scout’s first day of school, she was very frustrated and mad because she did not want to learn the way the teacher was demonstrating, but when she was being taught by Atticus, Scout learned more because she enjoyed it more. (SD)I also think that you will learn better by doing something, like the old and renowned quote, “Actions speak louder than words.” (CM)Scout had learned by practicing and practicing every night with her dad and not by just saying she would learn someday. If Scout had waited until she started school to learn, she would have been the worst in the class and since she didn’t like the teacher, Ms. Caroline, she would be really bad and would have barely learned anything. I think it is extraordinarily imperative (F.A.S.T.) to learn the way you want to and that will make you an enhanced scholar.
(TS)According to Dictionary.com, education is the act or process of imparting or acquiring general knowledge, developing the powers of reasoning and judgment, and generally of preparing oneself or others intellectually for a mature life. (CM)Atticus thinks that education is one of the most important aspects of life and he wants his daughter, Scout, to be apart of it. (CM)I feel that Atticus has helped Scout to prepare her self for life and helped her be educated. (CS)If Atticus continues on this road of educating Scout, I think he will have helped her become a brilliant and successful woman.

Final Draft, Essay 3

Colin Burlingham

Mr. H Salsich

8th Grade English

9/29/09

The Power of Words:

An Essay About the Lecture Calpurnia

Gave Scout About Respect

In To Kill A Mocking

Bird By Harpor Lee

_____(TS)A terrible and wise man, Eldridge Cleaver, once said, "respect commands itself and it can neither be given nor withheld when it is due." (CM) Though Cleaver was both an influential writer and involved in the Black Panther Party, he has helped change the world with his wise words. (CM)During the hard times in the 1960's, Cleaver was a very powerful speaker and caught attention from many. (CS)He was one of the few people who truly understood what respect was and how it was earned and in To Kill A Mocking Bird by Harpor Lee, Calpurnia understands respect as well.
_____(TS)What is Respect? (SD)According to dictionary.com, respect is the “deference to a right or privilege, and proper acceptance”, and in the novel To Kill a Mocking Bird, Calpurnia believes that one’s "comp’ny" is deserving of the highest respect. (CM)Jem’s company, Walter Cunningham, is less fortunate than herself, yet Scout treated him poorly when he was at her house for a nice and peaceful meal. (CM)Cal told Scout that even though she was more fortunate than the Cunninghams, “it don’t count for nothin’ the way you’re discracin’ ‘em.” (SD)Cal was livid about the way Scout was acting around her "comp’ny," and to be disrespectful to her company is disrespecting herself and her family.” (CM)Cal believes that one must be respectful even if your “comp’ny wants to eat up the table cloth". (CM)Scout didn't understand this and because of her lack of respect, was forced to eat dinner in the kitchen. (CS)As you can tell, Cal has great respect for all people, even those less fortunate.
_____(TS)I too have had experiences where I did not enjoy my company. (SD)Last year, two of my cousins, Julian and Aden, came to stay for the weekend, and I felt that they were very disrespectful. (CM)They immediately started screaming, crying, and arguing, and they also made a huge mess in every room in the house. (CM)The parents, Pan and Robin, sat there and didn't do anything; it was as if Julian and Aden weren't even there and it was extremely rude and disruptive. (SD)Another time, I was eating dinner at my grandfather's house with all the family members on my dad's side. (CM)At the beginning of dinner, Pan leisurely got up and went to the kitchen. (CM)My father then got up and went after him and when my dad got back, he said that Pan did not feel right intruding on a family dinner, which I think is very disrespectful considering he is family. (CS)Due to the rudeness in both of these occasions, the memory has been scarred into my mind forever.
_____(TS)Respect can mean many different things such as kindness or acceptance, but it is what you do with the respect that shapes you and the people around you. (CM)To be respected by others you need to respect yourself, and it is just as important as courage, happiness, or love. (CM) Few people can truly understand how difficult it is to earn respect from those around you and those who have learned this, are those who have practiced it themselves. (CS)As Ralph Waldo Emerson once said, "What lies behind us and what lies before us are tiny matters compared to what lies with in us;" that is respect.

OutlineThesis: Calpurnia’s lecture about “comp’ny

TS) Respect is…

1. SD) scout brought walter over

CM) Scout’s company treated bad

CM) Cal told scout she disgracing him

2. SD) Cals furious

CM) Cal is

CM) Cal said more fortunate

TS) happened to me

1. SD) Julian and Aden come

CM) making mess

CM) scream, cry, anoying

2. SD) Uncle pan would not eat at table

CM) he was rude/disrespectful

CM) chow thought he was company and ok

Final Draft, Essay 2

Colin Burlingham
Mr. H. Salsich
English 8th
9/23/09

The Misery of Mistakes:
This Essay is About When Scout Couldn't Find the
Right Words to Say in To Kill A Mocking Bird

(TS)A long time ago, when I was around the age of five, I was at one of my grandparent’s parties serving dinner and there was one person who was eating all the food. (CM)I walked up to him, and took his plate away early and then I didn’t know how to tell him to stop eating, so I just blurted out, “You are really fat; maybe you should stop stuffing your face.” (CM)Everyone in the room heard it and started laughing, except the old man. (CS)I was deeply embarrassed and I ran back to my house, but every now and then this happens; sometimes when you mean well, others might view it differently.

(TS)In To Kill a Mocking Bird, this happens a lot to Scout on her first day of school. (SD)Miss Caroline asked Scout to read from a book and she could read very well, but Miss Caroline was not impressed. (CM)“I suppose she chose me because she knew my name; as I read the alphabet a faint line appeared between her eyebrows, and after making me read most of My First Reader and the stock-market quotations from The Mobile Register aloud, she discovered that I was literate and looked at me with more than faint distaste. (p22)” (CM)Miss Caroline told Scout that she couldn’t be taught by her father any longer, and made Scout feel mad that she had to act dumb for the rest of the class. (SD) Out of boredom, Scout began to write a letter, to her friend Dill when Miss Caroline walked by. (CM)Miss Caroline caught Scout writing the letter and she got mad again and said, “We don’t script in the first grade, we print. You won’t learn to write until you’re in the third grade.(p 24)” (CM)After this, Scout had lost her enthusiasm for school even though she had been looking forward to it for so long. (SD)When lunch time came, everyone had a lunch except for Walter Cunningham, because he did not have enough money for lunch, and when Miss Caroline offered him money to get a meal, he declined it because he wouldn't be able to pay her back. (CM)Scout immediately thought that, “it was beyond (her) ability to explain things as well as Atticus, so (she) said,’ Your shamin’ him, Miss Caroline (p28)’” to keep Walter from embarrassment. (CM)Miss Caroline dragged Scout behind her desk and slapped her with the ruler, and then sent her to sit in the corner. (CS)Sometimes, things just come out the wrong way and you can get punished for them.
(TS)I hate it when you can’t find the right way to say something. (SD)This has happened to me many times and most often in school like Scout. (CM)In third grade, I was taking a grammar quiz and I could not remember the definition to the word “Hibernate,” so I had to guess and I put down, “to hide and eat,” which is absurd and the teacher got mad at me for not knowing the answer. (CM)This happened to Scout too when she was reading what the teacher asked her to read, and yet the teacher responded negatively and Scout was being punished for doing what she was told to do which is unfair, and if this happened to me, I would be upset with the teacher. (SD)This also happened a few years back, there was a new student, who was really smart, and he would raise his hand all the time in class. (CM)The student thought he was participating in class and wanted to show that he had studied. (CM)All the other students, including my self, thought he was showing off just to get on the teacher's good side. (SD)I especially hate it when you get punished for doing something too well. (CM)I was thinking about when I was in K1, and we had those little paper books to read for homework, and there was another student who could read the books very quickly during class. (CM)The teacher then got mad at him for doing his homework during class and she was also curious of how he became such a good reader. (CS)As you can see, even when you are doing the right thing, you can be viewed differently and get punished for it.
(TS)There is always a time in every person's life when you just can’t think of the right words to say. (CM)There are also times when you mean well, but it is viewed badly. (CM)It is always best to slow down and think before you act or speak. (CS)By the end of the day, I think that Scout will have learned to think first.

Final Draft, Essay 1

Colin Burlingham
Mr. H. Salsich
English 8
September 22, 2009
You Can't Judge a Book By Its Cover:

An Essay About Fearing

the Differences of People

(TS)When I was about eleven, I met this man who at the time looked funny but as time passed, I got to know him and found out that it was a battle wound from the war. (CM1)When I learned this, I was thankful, amazed and I was afraid. (CM2)I was scared of the differences between us. (CS)In the book, To Kill a Mocking Bird, this is exactly what is going on.
(TS)The fear of differences in people can really affect the way people act, and this is shown by the people in the town of Maycomb and their fear of the Radley Family. (SD)Mr. Radley was known by the towns people to be a "malevolent phantom.(p.10)" (CM)He lived in the town of Maycomb all his life, but was never seen because they thought he only came out at night when the moon wasn't out. (CM)The towns people started making up rumers about him like "when peoples azaleas froze in a cold snap, it was because he had breathed on them.(p.10)" (SD)The Radley family was very different from the rest of the people in the town. (CM)They tended to keep to themselves and they never went to missionary circles. (CM)On Sundays, every door in the town would be open wide except for the Radleys' doors, and the Radleys even closed their shutters. (SD)All the neighbors feared the Radley family so much that they would even lock all their door and window at night. (CM)The neighbors started to say that they ate raw squirrels and cats. (CM)They described Boo Radley as having blood stained hands, yellow rotten teeth, drool on his face, and eyes popped out of his head! (CS)As you can see, the fear of the Radleys had affected how the people in the town of Maycomb behave and interact with this family.
(TS)Differences in people can cause fear, which in turn can change how people behave, and I’ve experienced this personally. (SD)When I was 10 years old, I travelled to Hong Kong to visit some relatives, and I felt strange at times because I looked different than everyone else. (CM1)Not only was I the only American boy around, but I was also the only one on the crowded streets that wore a sweatshirt and jeans, while everyone else around me dressed in suits. (CM2)In the book, To Kill a Mockingbird, I think this is how Boo Radley would have felt if he ever came out of his house during the day. (SD)On another trip, I went to Spanish Town in the British Virgin Islands, and everyone, even the children, spoke fluent Spanish. (CM1)This made me feel like an outcast because I didn’t understand their conversations, and it made me self-conscious. (CM2)I think Boo Radley would feel very self conscious if he were to socialize more with the people in Maycomb. (SD)When you’re with people who are different, you tend to fear them because of your lack of understanding. (CM1)People aren’t always trying to be different; they just don’t know how to fit in. (CM2)The Radley’s didn’t come out a lot because they didn’t fit in with the town crowd, yet the town’s people didn’t understand the Radley’s either. (CS)Differences in people can cause fear, and in order to relinquish this fear, you need to fully understand what the person is like.
(TS)I remember being eleven and being afraid of a kind, normal man who was injured in the war. (CM1)I was not scared of what his face looked like or any other physical appearance I saw. (CM2)I was fearful of the differences. (CS)The fear in differences can really effect how a person can act, but you have to face your fears and it can really change your life.