Colin Burlingham
Mr. H Salsich
8 English
11/5/09
Mr. H Salsich
8 English
11/5/09
Colin’s English Work:
What I have Learned and
Need to Work on This Year.
_____(TS)This year in eighth grade English class, I, an eighth grader and a future architect, have gotten better and worse. (SD)One of the diverse skills I have enhanced is my writing. (CM)Now, I know how to use antithesis; I know how to use anaphora; and I know how to use much more. (CM)I have also learned to write an effective 11 sentence paragraph like the one you happen to be reading at this moment. (SD)To go on, one of the colossal subjects I need to work on is my jargon. (CM)I am very bad at terminology and I got a 34% on the vocabulary section of the SSATs. (CM)If I ever expect to go to a good school in my future, I will need to kick that low grade up to at least a 60% average. (SD)I also need to work on my reading. (CM)At the moment, I am reading To Kill a Mockingbird by Harper Lee and I read it very slow. (CM)I will need to muse on my reading to make it more systematic and much quicker. (CS)There will always be room for improvement and I will keep working hard.
1 comments:
Don't forget your sub title Colin.
you have good transitions in your writing.
Maybe you could have some longer quotes in you next paragraph.
I like the unity in your chunks colin .
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