Out Line
1st body
TS: Articus (S-V split) feels that education is important
SD: Articus enjoys teaching Scout
CM: looks forward to reading every night
CM: wants her to stay in school
SD: don’t be like Burris Ewell
CM: Disgrace of town
CM: Lives like animal
SD: Articus makes a deal
CM: go to school and we will read
CM: keep deal secret
CS: Articus feels strongly about education
2nd body
TS: education should be fun, you learn your own way, and learn by doing
SD: education should be fun
CM: you will remember better
CM: Scout had fun learning with father
SD: should do what you want to do
CM: learn how you want and are good at
CM: Scout liked to learn with her dad
SD: learn by doing
CM: Scout learned to read by practicing
CM: if she waited till school, she would be bad
CS: important to do things the way you want
Second Draft For Grading
Colin Burlingham
Mr. H Salsich
English 8
10/7/09
EDUCATION:
An Essay About How Atticus
Feels About Education
An Essay About How Atticus
Feels About Education
(TS)When I was younger, I would ask my parents why I had to go to school. (CM)Every time, they would both say that I needed to learn the basics of knowledge that everyone would need to live a productive life and that if I did learn this, I would grow up to be very successful. (CM)Thinking this, I would get up early and I was excited for school. (CS)Atticus, Scouts father, also thinks that education is extremely important.
(TS)Atticus, a smart and kind man, the father of Scout and Jem, feels that education is exceedingly important (app. S-V split). (SD)Atticus enjoys teaching Scout, a very smart young girl, very much, and he reads with her almost every night, but when Scout told him this had to stop, he was devastated. (CM)Atticus was waiting with the paper excided to read when Scout sadly said, “[…] If I on goin’ to school, we can’t ever read any more…” and that made Atticus awfully sad and he was curios why he could not teach her any more. (CM)After Scout told him what had happened that day, Atticus then tells Scout that she should stay in school and put her self in Ms. Caroline’s “[…] skin and walk around in it,” you will never understand the person and why they have done what they have done. (SD)After that, Atticus told Scout he did not want Scout to be anything like the Ewell family. (CM)The Ewell family only goes to school the first day of the year and they are the disgrace of the town. (CM)The Ewells, dirty rotten misfits, live like animals and they also have never worked an honest day in their lives according to Atticus and most of the town. (SD)Later, Atticus strikes up a great deal with Scout; “If you’ll concede the necessity of going to school, we’ll go on reading every night just as we always have,” and then Scout agrees with this clever barging. (CM)Atticus then tells Scout to keep this deal quiet because if Ms. Caroline, the kind, discipline, school teacher, finds out, she would hunt him down (app. S-V split). (CM)Atticus thinks that he should still be aloud to teach Scout, but he respects her as the teacher and does not want to get in her way. (CS)As you can see, Atticus has very strong feelings toward education and wants Scout to go to school no madder what so she can learn and fit in with everyone around her.
(TS)I think education should be taught the way you learn best and you should learn by doing something fun with it. (SD)According to Wikipedia.com, fun is an activity that is enjoyable or amusing. (CM)Education should be fun, and I think that you will remember what you have learned better if the teacher makes it amusing for you. (CM)When Atticus and Scout were reading in the evenings, sitting on the couch reading the paper, he made education fun and enjoyable for Scout, reading was learned faster and more efficiently. (SD)If you are being taught, you should also be educated in the manner that best suits you, learning from hands on experiences (participle closer). (CM)If all you do is read books, that gets boring fast and you zone out, but if you go out and learn how you want to, you will remember it longer. (CM)On Scout’s first day of school, she was very frustrated and mad because she did not want to learn the way the teacher was demonstrating, but when she was being taught by Atticus, Scout learned more because she enjoyed it more. (SD)I also think that you will learn better by doing something, like the old and renowned quote, “Actions speak louder than words.” (CM)Scout had learned by practicing and practicing every night with her dad and not by just saying she would learn someday. If Scout had waited until she started school to learn, she would have been the worst in the class and since she didn’t like the teacher, Ms. Caroline, she would be really bad and would have barely learned anything. I think it is extraordinarily imperative (F.A.S.T.) to learn the way you want to and that will make you an enhanced scholar.
(TS)According to Dictionary.com, education is the act or process of imparting or acquiring general knowledge, developing the powers of reasoning and judgment, and generally of preparing oneself or others intellectually for a mature life. (CM)Atticus thinks that education is one of the most important aspects of life and he wants his daughter, Scout, to be apart of it. (CM)I feel that Atticus has helped Scout to prepare her self for life and helped her be educated. (CS)If Atticus continues on this road of educating Scout, I think he will have helped her become a brilliant and successful woman.
(TS)Atticus, a smart and kind man, the father of Scout and Jem, feels that education is exceedingly important (app. S-V split). (SD)Atticus enjoys teaching Scout, a very smart young girl, very much, and he reads with her almost every night, but when Scout told him this had to stop, he was devastated. (CM)Atticus was waiting with the paper excided to read when Scout sadly said, “[…] If I on goin’ to school, we can’t ever read any more…” and that made Atticus awfully sad and he was curios why he could not teach her any more. (CM)After Scout told him what had happened that day, Atticus then tells Scout that she should stay in school and put her self in Ms. Caroline’s “[…] skin and walk around in it,” you will never understand the person and why they have done what they have done. (SD)After that, Atticus told Scout he did not want Scout to be anything like the Ewell family. (CM)The Ewell family only goes to school the first day of the year and they are the disgrace of the town. (CM)The Ewells, dirty rotten misfits, live like animals and they also have never worked an honest day in their lives according to Atticus and most of the town. (SD)Later, Atticus strikes up a great deal with Scout; “If you’ll concede the necessity of going to school, we’ll go on reading every night just as we always have,” and then Scout agrees with this clever barging. (CM)Atticus then tells Scout to keep this deal quiet because if Ms. Caroline, the kind, discipline, school teacher, finds out, she would hunt him down (app. S-V split). (CM)Atticus thinks that he should still be aloud to teach Scout, but he respects her as the teacher and does not want to get in her way. (CS)As you can see, Atticus has very strong feelings toward education and wants Scout to go to school no madder what so she can learn and fit in with everyone around her.
(TS)I think education should be taught the way you learn best and you should learn by doing something fun with it. (SD)According to Wikipedia.com, fun is an activity that is enjoyable or amusing. (CM)Education should be fun, and I think that you will remember what you have learned better if the teacher makes it amusing for you. (CM)When Atticus and Scout were reading in the evenings, sitting on the couch reading the paper, he made education fun and enjoyable for Scout, reading was learned faster and more efficiently. (SD)If you are being taught, you should also be educated in the manner that best suits you, learning from hands on experiences (participle closer). (CM)If all you do is read books, that gets boring fast and you zone out, but if you go out and learn how you want to, you will remember it longer. (CM)On Scout’s first day of school, she was very frustrated and mad because she did not want to learn the way the teacher was demonstrating, but when she was being taught by Atticus, Scout learned more because she enjoyed it more. (SD)I also think that you will learn better by doing something, like the old and renowned quote, “Actions speak louder than words.” (CM)Scout had learned by practicing and practicing every night with her dad and not by just saying she would learn someday. If Scout had waited until she started school to learn, she would have been the worst in the class and since she didn’t like the teacher, Ms. Caroline, she would be really bad and would have barely learned anything. I think it is extraordinarily imperative (F.A.S.T.) to learn the way you want to and that will make you an enhanced scholar.
(TS)According to Dictionary.com, education is the act or process of imparting or acquiring general knowledge, developing the powers of reasoning and judgment, and generally of preparing oneself or others intellectually for a mature life. (CM)Atticus thinks that education is one of the most important aspects of life and he wants his daughter, Scout, to be apart of it. (CM)I feel that Atticus has helped Scout to prepare her self for life and helped her be educated. (CS)If Atticus continues on this road of educating Scout, I think he will have helped her become a brilliant and successful woman.
3 comments:
Hi Colin. I have a favor to ask. Could you change your template so it's easier for me to read? Perhaps a plainer background would help. Try some of the templates that Blogger offers. (Go to "customize".)
Also, check out this sentence: "I think education should be taught they way you want..." "They" is a typo, and "the way you want" is a little vague. A reader wouldn't know exactly what that means. Try to make it clearer and more specific.
Good luck!
Keep up the fine work.
Colin,
1) In your first body paragraph in first CM you have "excided" that should be excited.
2) In your first body paragraph in your first CM inside of the quote you typed ""If I on goin'.."" should that be "If I keep on goin'"?
3) I like all of your big descriptive words and you long sentences.
I like how all your CM sentences relate to your SD sentences because I know its hard to stay on track sometimes.
"madder" I think the word your looking for is matter.
“[…] If I on goin’ to school, we can’t ever read any more…” and that."
I think you have a typo in this sentence.
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