Essay Top Sentences

Top Sentences of 2010

Essay 23

5/17/10

This I believe:

An Essay About What is Important to Me

(CM)We must manage the earth's resources in order to ensure that they will remain available in the indefinite future. (CM)"What happens within Nature humans should not have a say [in] and leave Nature to Nature" (Leave Nature to Nature by Francis Duggan).

I chose these two sentences because I think they

flow very well and the quote fits in perfectly.

*****

Essay 19

4/8/10

My Song:

An Essay about the "Traveling Soldier"

By the Dixie Chicks and

Romeo and Juliet

_____(TS)Emotions are important characters in the play of life.

(CS)You must embrace these gifts, these punishments, these emotions.

I chose these two sentences because they clearly

illustrate the umbrella. They connect together even though

one they are the first and last sentences.

*****

Essay 13

1/27/10

Change:

Change To Kill a Mockingbird

and in My Life.

My life, a wild roller coaster, full of suspense, changes constantly (Periodic Sentence).

I chose this sentences because it is a great periodic sentence

and it caught my attention while reading

*****

Essay 11

1/12/10

FEAR:

Fear in To Kill a Mockingbird and in My Life

_____Fear. What is it; where is it; why is it? We often ask ourselves these three basic questions, but have you ever gotten an answer? Have you ever taken the time to look?

The reason I chose these few sentences is because I honestly

believe this was my best introductory sentence I wrote all year.

It grabs the readers attention and pulls him in.

*****

Essay 11

1/12/10

FEAR:

Fear in To Kill a Mockingbird and in My Life

Like a thick fog, the shadows would move in and demolish the vision of those stuck within.

I chose this sentence because it expresses a lot of

emotion about fear and it is a good simile.

*****

Essay 11

1/12/10

FEAR:

Fear in To Kill a Mockingbird and in My Life

Legends can tell us nothing, or everything. It is all in what you believe, but until the day we truly find out why fear is, we will never know.

When I wrote this sentence, I made it purposely

to make the reader think and I believe it does just that.

*****

Essay 7

0/28/09

Trepidation:
An Essay about Fear in My Life

(CS)No matter how hard I try, no matter what I do, I will always have apprehension.

I chose this sentence because it fits into the

paragraph perfectly because it was about over-

coming your fears. It was also a strong closer.

*****

Essay 5

10/14/09

Privacy Is Hard To Please:

An essay about Privacy

in To Kill A Mocking Bird

(TS)Privacy is like the wind; it comes and it goes. (CM)You can catch it, but it will only get away in the future.

I like these two sentences because they are

a great simile and they plant a good

picture in your mind.

*****

Essay 2

9/23/09

The Misery of Mistakes:
This Essay is About When Scout Couldn't Find the
Right Words to Say in To Kill A Mocking Bird

“I suppose she chose me because she knew my name; as I read the alphabet a faint line appeared between her eyebrows, and after making me read most of My First Reader and the stock-market quotations from The Mobile Register aloud, she discovered that I was literate and looked at me with more than faint distaste. (p22)”

I chose this sentence because I thought the quote fit in

nicely and it is also a very long sentence

which can increase the power of the writing

*****

Essay 1

9/22/09

You Can't Judge a Book By Its Cover:

An Essay About Fearing the Differences of People

(TS)When I was about eleven, I met this man who at the time looked funny but as time passed, I got to know him and found out that it was a battle wound from the war. (CM1)When I learned this, I was thankful, amazed and I was afraid. (CM2)I was scared of the differences between us.

I Like this introduction paragraph because it really draws

the reader in and shows him what

the paragraph will be about.

Essay 23 Self Assessment

Colin

Mr. Salsich

8 English

5/18/10

Self Assessment

1. What am I continuing to work on?

In this essay, I am continuing to work on the unity of all three paragraphs because I feel I got a little off track in some points.

2. What is a strong point?

I feel a strong point in this essay would be the variety of sentences because I use many specials and they have helped to improve it.

3. What is a week point?

Getting my essay to flow well is still a week point in my writing. I think this would be much better if the sentences flowed into each other nice and smoothly.

4. What grade would I give myself?

For this essay, I would give myself an "A" because I honestly feel it is some of my best writing all year and I have worked more on this than any other essay.

Essay 23

Colin

Mr. Salsich

8 English

5/17/10

This I believe:

An Essay About What is Important to Me

_____(TS)"Man destroys nature far more worse than nature destroys it's self" (Nature Destroys Nature, by Qualme Tari Misterres of Death Nat. Norvile). (CM)So why do we continue doing what we do? (CM)I was once asked, "What do [I] personally believe is really important"; my rejoinder was, "I believe in the sustainability of our natural resources and the future of this planet" (Quote said by Mr. Salsich, Apt. Thesaurus Word). (CS)This planet is our future and we must do what ever we can to protect it.

_____(TS)Sustainability, a very important issue facing us today, is something that we need to be involved in both locally and globally. (SD)There are many natural resources that we can harness in this world. (CM)Natural resources such as air, wind, sun, and water can and should be used for energy. (CM)By using these primary resources, we will be able to cut costs, we will be able to promote clean air, and we will help sustain the environment (Tricolon and Apt. Thesaurus Word). (SD)In addition, we should sustain our biological ecosystems too. (CM)If we don't save our wetlands, forests, and oceans, the benefits we receive from these biological resources will be gone and considered abiotic ("Free of living things") (Apt. Thesaurus Word and Parallelism). (CM)By destroying these precious systems and the life they contain, we will only be hurting ourselves in the long run. (SD)Also, we need to use more environmental technology in our daily lives. (CM)At home, at school, at work, and even at a friend's house, we should all be doing simple tasks like recycling and composting (Anaphora). (CM)To add on to this, we could also be using energy efficient light bulbs, and non-harmful chemicals, but one of the easiest things to do to help promote sustainability is to turn the lights off to save energy. (CS)Both locally and globally, I believe that sustainability is one of the most important issues facing our society today.

_____(TS)This earth is our future and we must keep it intact, we must protect it, and we must covet our natural resources (Apt Thesaurus Word). (CM)We must manage the earth's resources in order to ensure that they will remain available in the indefinite future. (CM)"What happens within Nature humans should not have a say [in] and leave Nature to Nature" (Leave Nature to Nature by Francis Duggan). (CS)I feel it is really important to protect our natural resources, and if we do not become sustainable and continue to destroy the earth, some day the earth will fight back.

Essay 22 Self Assessment

Colin

Mr. Salsich

8 English

5/12/10

Self Assessment

1. What am I continuing to work on?

In this essay, I am always working on making it flow nice and smoothly because I feel it still needs some improvements with that.

2. What is a strong point?

A strong point, I think, would be the bell words because I repeated them many times and it helped the essay have more unity.

3. What is a weak point?

I think a weak point would be the intro and concluding paragraphs because they still seem a little weak to me.

4. What grade would I give myself?

For this essay, I would give myself an "A-" because I worked very hard on it, it took a lot of time to put together, and all in all, I think I did a good job.

Essay 22

Colin

Mr. Salsich

8 English

5/5/10

Unseen Beauty:

An Essay About Rare Beauty in Unexpected Places

And the Poem Valentine for Ernest Mann

_____(TS)Beauty is a rare commodity and can only be acquired by a few. (CM)Or can it? (CM)According to Naomi Shihab Nye's poem, "Valentine for Ernest Mann," you can find beauty in everything, and everywhere you look. (CS)According to the poem, a man says "Nothing is ugly just because the world [says] so," and this is true in many ways.

_____(TS)In Naomi Shihab Nye's poem, "Valentine for Ernest Mann," she talks about a man who thought every thing was beautiful, even the most hideous of things (Bell Word). (SD)In the minds of certain people, things are ugly and things are pretty, and this all depends on the person's persona (Apt. Thesaurus Word). (CM)According to the man in her poem, beauty can be seen by everything depending on how one perceives it (Apt. Thesaurus Word). (CM)This was the purpose of her poem to me, to try to teach people that if you look closely, beauty can be found though sometimes people don't see it. (SD)In addition, there are many ways the poet could have developed this theme, as I believe all she did was look around. (CM)In the media, you can find beauty everywhere, ugliness everywhere, and nonacceptance everywhere (Purposeful Repetition). (CM)The media also throws things way out of proportion so if there was a beautiful act, all you would see was the ugly side and this is where I believe the poet got her theme from. (CS)Beauty is always evident yet our innocent minds have been altered by the media, people and other forms of commercialism to turn beautiful actions, places, and people into into ugliness.

_____(TS)"Maybe if we reinvent what life has given us," we would discover more beauty in our world (Bell Word). (SD)I believe that most stories in the media are not ugly, but are the opposite because we only see one side of the story. (CM)The papers, the magazines and the televisions show you only part of the alluring story, so in most cases, you may not even know why the person did the crime (Apt. Thesaurus Word and Purposeful Repetition). (CM)Often you may not even be told the truth at all and thats when things become ugly to some. (SD)In addition, a long time ago, I used to go down to my friends swamp and play around in the deep mud. (CM)To any ordinary person, the thick swamp would be repugnant and people would try to stay away, but to me, this was a place of nirvana (Apt. Thesaurus Words). (CM)Because I knew the swamp better than those that looked at it from afar , I was able to appreciate it's value and beauty in more depth. (SD)The more you come to understand something, the more you come to know something, the more you come to find beauty in that something. (CM)In "Valentine for Ernest Mann," the man talks about finding beauty in the two skunks eyes and he came to find this by learning about the skunks. (CM)To him, they were not just that black thing that sprays odors at you, but instead, those magnificent creatures in the forest. (CS)The more we come to know something, the more beauty we will find no matter what it is.

_____(TS)Beauty is everywhere you look, everything you see, and all there is. (CM)You can not find one thing on this beautiful earth that would not have beauty surrounding it. (CM)"Nothing is ugly just because the world said so." (CS)And in the words of Francis Duggan, "It is a rare beauty that will never die."

Essay 21 Self Assessment

Colin
Mr. Salsich
8 English
5/4/10

Self Assessment

1. What am I continuing to work on?
In my essay, I am continuing to work on many small things, but the biggest is making my poem flow well. To me, it still sounds a bit weird and I will continue to work on it.

2. What is strong about my essay?
In my essay, I believe my haiku poem is the strongest. I tried to write it the way Shakespear wrote back then.

3. What is weak in my essay?
In my essay, I believe the 8 sentence paragraph is weak. It still needs some tweaking and the examples are not the best.

4. What grade would I give myself?
For this essay, I think I should get an "-A" because I worked very hard on it and spent a lot of time picking the genres to get them perfect.